Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, expand content, and make answer more natural. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then give one or two supporting details about the bike (what kind, who it belonged to, a brief memory). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used it to ride to the park almost every day. Because it was lightweight and had training wheels at first, I learned to balance quickly and remember feeling very proud when I could ride without help.

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific, use present-tense general statement then give 1–2 supporting reasons with linking words. Replace vague phrase “and such” with concrete examples or comparisons. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., common, convenient, affordable) and a linking word like “for example” or “particularly” to structure the answer.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. For example, many students and low-income workers rely on bicycles to get to school or work, and they are also popular in cities where traffic is heavy because they can be quicker than cars.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense. The student's response 'Yes, I have.' incorrectly uses the present tense. Replace with 'Yes, I did.' to match past-tense question. Suggestion: use past tense auxiliaries (did) for past simple questions.

× Yes, because people with no other transportation use bike to go to work, to school and such.

✓ Yes, because people with no other transportation use bikes to go to work, to school, and so on.

Multiple issues: 'use bike' is missing plural and article—should be 'use bikes' when referring generally (singular/plural issue as well), and 'and such' is informal; 'so on' or 'and so on' is clearer. Also add commas for list. Suggestion: pluralize 'bike' to 'bikes' for general statements and use 'and so on' or 'and such' carefully; include commas in lists.