Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer direct, natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one or two specific supporting details using simple linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid formal or awkward phrases like “I don't agree to this statement” or “severe case,” and don’t over-explain about licensing unless it’s relevant. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use everyday vocabulary.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was unsafe. For example, there were few safe places to ride near our home, so they preferred I learn to cycle later when I was older.

提案: Be natural and concise while giving specific examples and linking words. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “country” twice) and formal connectors like “moreover” in Part 1; use everyday linking words (because, so, for example). Keep to 2–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “motorbikes” or “scooters,” “commute”).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they’re cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work in the morning since public transport is infrequent in smaller towns.

× I don't agree to this statement as I never possessed a bike when I was a child.

✓ I don't agree with this statement because I never had a bike when I was a child.

The verb 'agree' collocates with the preposition 'with' not 'to' in this context (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). Also, 'possessed' is unusually formal for personal ownership in speech; 'had' is the natural past-tense verb (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue and 5: Past tense issue are related, but the specific fixes are preposition and verb choice). Suggestion: use 'agree with' and simple past 'had' for natural spoken English. Note: Per instructions, only one primary grammar type ID is required; use ID 11 for the preposition error.

× Moreover, it is a very severe case of possessing a bike being an infant or even a teenager as we are not even able to access our eligibility criteria that is a license nowadays.

✓ Moreover, it would be unsafe for an infant or even a teenager to have a bike because they cannot obtain a driving license yet.

The original sentence has unnatural phrasing and incorrect word choices ('severe case of possessing a bike', 'being an infant', 'access our eligibility criteria') which cause sentence structure problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26: Sentence structure errors) and incorrect use of vocabulary. Suggestion: simplify the idea: 'unsafe for an infant or teenager to have a bike' and use 'obtain a driving license' for clarity. Primary grammar type ID used: 26.

× So it is very harmful for even us to practice with a bike.

✓ So it would be dangerous for us to practice riding a bike.

The phrase 'harmful for even us' is awkward and 'practice with a bike' is not the usual collocation; we say 'practice riding a bike'. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Also 'would be dangerous' fits the conditional meaning better (Grammar Problem Type ID 7: Future tense issue is less relevant than sentence restructuring). Suggestion: use 'dangerous' and the verb phrase 'practice riding'. Primary grammar type ID used: 26.

× Definitely, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Definitely, bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as written. No correction needed. However, in spoken English you might say 'Motorbikes' or 'bicycles' for clarity depending on which type is meant. (Grammar Problem Type ID 22: Article errors not applicable.)

× Moreover, most of the population of my country possesses bikes as it is a very integral aspect for their transportation facilities in the areas where public transport is not available for 24 hours.

✓ Moreover, most people in my country own bikes because they are essential for transportation in areas where public transport is not available around the clock.

'Most of the population of my country possesses bikes' is wordy and uses awkward verbs; 'most people... own bikes' is natural (Grammar Problem Type ID 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers and ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). 'Integral aspect for their transportation facilities' is incorrect collocation; use 'essential for transportation'. 'Not available for 24 hours' is awkward; 'not available around the clock' or 'not available 24 hours a day' is better. Suggestion: simplify and use natural collocations: 'most people... own bikes' and 'essential for transportation'. Primary grammar type ID used: 14.

× In addition to this, it also helps to travel some local distances with some limited amount of fuel.

✓ In addition, they also help people travel short local distances using a small amount of fuel.

'Helps to travel some local distances' is awkward; use 'help people travel short local distances'. 'With some limited amount of fuel' is ungrammatical; use 'using a small amount of fuel' or 'with little fuel'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and quantifiers (Grammar Problem Type ID 11 and 14). Suggestion: rewrite to 'help people travel short distances using little fuel'. Primary grammar type ID used: 11.