Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and irrelevant phrases. Give a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then one or two clear supporting details explaining why. Use past tense when talking about childhood and avoid unrelated words. Also limit to 1–3 sentences to be natural and concise.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was unsafe for me to ride on busy streets, so they preferred I walked or took public transport to school.

提案: Your response repeats words and is disorganized. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add specific reasons (e.g. affordability, traffic, convenience) using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Keep sentences short and accurate, and use correct vocabulary (motorbike, bicycle, traffic).

例: Yes, bikes and motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and help people avoid traffic jams. For example, many commuters use motorbikes to travel quickly through busy city streets.

× No, I don't have a bike to win my mum.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past simple. 'Don't have' is present tense. Also 'to win my mum' is unclear and likely incorrect word choice; replacing the whole phrase with a correct past response clarifies meaning.

× I am flying because it is a day when it went studying and that was why I'm not there to drive any type of vehicle.

✓ I was often busy with studying, so I couldn't go out or drive any vehicle.

The original sentence uses incorrect verbs and tenses ('I am flying','it went studying') and mixed time references. Use simple past ('was','couldn't') to describe past habitual situation. 'Flying' is inappropriate; replace with 'busy with studying' and simplify the clause order for clarity.

× Yes, mobikes are very popular in the country because it is very common and also it is motor to use.

✓ Yes, motorbikes are very popular in the country because they are common and easy to use.

Plural noun 'motorbikes' requires plural pronoun and verb agreement ('they are'). 'It is motor to use' is ungrammatical; use 'easy to use' or 'convenient to use'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct adjective choice.

× Many of the persons to use a mobike before it is very good and due to high traffic the cars are motor allowed to use user data is the only option being semester bike and so bicycle that was wide bike bike motorbikes are very useful and also been.

✓ Many people used motorbikes before because they are convenient, and with high traffic, cars are less practical. Motorbikes and bicycles are useful options.

The original sentence has multiple pronoun and noun errors ('persons','to use a mobike before it is very good','user data is the only option'), redundant and confused phrases. Replace 'many of the persons' with 'many people'; use past 'used' or present 'use' consistently; simplify and split into clear sentences. Remove unrelated fragments and ensure correct pronoun references.