Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and articles), clarity and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it within 2–4 sentences. For example, correct tense: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' Explain reason briefly and a specific consequence: 'so I usually walked or took public transport.'

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. Therefore, I usually walked to school or took the bus, which meant I missed the freedom that riding would have given me.

提案: Correct grammar and sentence structure, and give specific supporting details linked coherently. Start with a clear opinion, then use linking words (because/for example) and provide concrete evidence (number of shops, types of bikes, who uses them). Keep answers concise and natural (2–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because there are many bicycle shops in both cities and towns. For example, these shops sell a wide range of bikes—commuter, mountain and children's models—and many people use them for short-distance travel and exercise.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time marker 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'didn't have' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past events: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× That's because my parents have enough money to buy the bicycle for me.

✓ That's because my parents didn't have enough money to buy a bicycle for me.

The original uses present perfect 'have' but context is past (when she was a child). Use past 'didn't have.' Also article use: 'a bicycle' is more natural here. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the time frame and use an indefinite article for a single bicycle.

× However, I can go anywhere with.

✓ However, I couldn't go anywhere with it.

The fragment 'go anywhere with' is incomplete and lacks an object; also needs past tense to match earlier sentences. 'Couldnt' (couldn't) expresses past ability. Add the pronoun 'it' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: Complete the verb phrase with an object and match tense: 'I couldn't go anywhere with it.'

× I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'bikes are popular' correctly uses plural subject with plural verb. No change needed.

× That's because the bicycle shops is are anywhere in my country and in the shop the but I many variety of the bicycle are sold in the.

✓ That's because bicycle shops are everywhere in my country, and many varieties of bicycles are sold in those shops.

The original has multiple errors: 'the bicycle shops is are' mixes verbs and unnecessary definite article; use plural subject 'bicycle shops' with plural verb 'are.' 'Anywhere' should be 'everywhere.' The clause 'in the shop the but I many variety of the bicycle are sold in the' is ungrammatical—correct structure: 'many varieties of bicycles are sold in those shops.' Use plural 'varieties' and plural noun 'bicycles.' Suggestion: Simplify and reorder: 'bicycle shops are everywhere... many varieties of bicycles are sold in those shops.'