Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a direct, concise response (one topic sentence) and then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Keep total length under five sentences and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "bike" not "mic").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon. Because the streets were quiet, I learned to balance quickly.

提案: The answer attempts to respond but has pronunciation/word choice errors and lacks clarity and specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then add supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use correct vocabulary ('bikes') and provide a reason or example to make the answer more specific.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For example, many people cycle to work or to the market, especially in smaller towns where traffic is heavy.

× If mics are quite popular in my country, most people use it to travel.

✓ Bikes are quite popular in my country; most people use them to travel.

Pronoun disagreement: 'mics' is a typo for 'bikes' and 'it' is singular while referring to the plural noun 'bikes'. Also the sentence-level connector 'If' is inappropriate here because the speaker is making a general statement rather than a conditional. Use the plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'bikes' and start the sentence directly (or use a semicolon or conjunction) to express the general fact. Suggestions: correct the noun to 'bikes', replace 'If' with nothing or 'Overall,' and change 'it' to 'them' so subject and pronoun agree and the sentence reads naturally.'