Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and verb forms), sentence structure and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and redundant phrases. For example, use 'I had a bike' not 'I have a bike while I was a child', use gerunds correctly ('I usually rode my bike' or 'I used to ride my bike'), and make concise points about purpose and convenience.

例: I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it to school and to visit friends, which saved me time and gave me freedom. In addition, it was convenient for short trips because parking and traffic were easier to manage than with a car.

提案: Work on subject-verb agreement, clearer vocabulary, and adding specific examples. Begin with a direct topic sentence ('Yes, I think bikes are popular'), then give concrete reasons and use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid vague phrases like 'practice aesthetics' and unclear locations. Be concise and specific about where and why you see many cyclists.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people cycle for exercise and commuting, and I often see groups of cyclists practicing on the park trails and bike lanes near the city centre. Because bike lanes are expanding and public awareness of fitness is increasing, more people choose cycling.

× Yes, I have a bike while I was a child I usually riding bike, go to school and uh, finding my friends. So I really think bike is convenient for the ride and the traffics.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode my bike to school and to meet my friends. I think bikes are convenient for traveling and for dealing with traffic.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child' (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'I usually riding bike, go to school and finding my friends' mixes forms; correct sequence uses simple past 'rode' and infinitive/parallel structure 'to school and to meet my friends' (Verb + -ing form and sentence structure issues; primary is Present tense issue ID 6). 'bike is convenient' should be plural 'bikes are convenient' to match general statement about types (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'the traffics' is incorrect; 'traffic' is uncountable so use 'traffic' without article (Article errors / Incorrect use of quantifiers; use ID 22). Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for past experiences, use parallel verb structures ('rode' and 'to meet'), make nouns agree in number, and use uncountable noun 'traffic' without 'the' or plural 'traffics'.

× Yes, I think bike are popular in my country because I often see lots of biker doing practice aesthetics around St. and up and.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because I often see many cyclists practicing around the streets.

Subject-verb agreement and noun form errors: 'bike are' is incorrect; the noun should be plural 'bikes' to match the plural verb idea or change verb—here 'bikes are' is correct (Subject-verb agreement, ID 27 and Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'lots of biker' should be 'many cyclists' or 'a lot of bikers' to use correct plural noun form (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'doing practice aesthetics' is unnatural; the intended meaning is 'practicing' (use verb form 'practicing', Verb + -ing form ID 8). 'around St. and up and' is unclear; likely 'around the streets' or 'around the city'—use a clear noun and article as needed (Incorrect use of abbreviations and articles, ID 17). Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number, use correct plural nouns, use standard verbs ('practicing'), and choose clear place expressions like 'around the streets' or 'around the city'.