Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejora la claridad y la corrección gramatical. Evita repeticiones (por ejemplo “I I”) y usa tiempos correctos: si hablas de un hecho pasado, usa el pasado simple o pasado perfecto cuando sea necesario. Organiza la respuesta con una oración temática seguida de detalles concretos y usa conectores breves (por ejemplo, “so”, “then”, “because”). Practica eliminar redundancias y limitarte a 2–3 oraciones bien formadas para sonar más natural.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I started middle school, and I learned to ride it by practicing around my neighborhood. As a result, I used it to commute to school most days.

提案: Haz la respuesta más coherente y corrige la estructura de las oraciones. Evita muletillas (“umm”) y organiza la idea principal seguida de razones claras. Usa conectores adecuados (por ejemplo, “however”, “because”, “for example”) y detalles específicos (lugares o datos) para apoyar tu opinión. Mantén 2–3 oraciones concisas para mayor efectividad.

例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in my country. However, in recent years many people have bought private vehicles, so cycling has declined; nevertheless, shared bikes remain common near subway stations and busy areas, which makes short trips convenient.

× Yes, I I had a bike since I had to ride my bike to my school ever since I was a middle high school student.

✓ Yes, I had a bike because I had to ride it to my school ever since I was in middle and high school.

The speaker mixes 'since' with past simple and repeats 'I'. Use 'because' to express reason in past and 'ever since' with a time period needs 'in' before 'middle and high school'. Remove duplicate word. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use 'had' consistently for past events and 'because' for reason.

× So my parents got me a bike and I started to learn on my own.

✓ So my parents bought me a bike, and I started to learn to ride on my own.

Missing object 'to ride' after 'learn' causes unnatural structure. Use 'bought' rather than 'got' for clarity and 'learn to ride' is the correct verb pattern. Keep past tense consistent.

× Yes bikes are popular umm but I don't think recent years cause a lot of people will have their own vehicle.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular, but I don't think so in recent years because many people have their own vehicles.

The original mixes tenses and uses 'cause' incorrectly. Use present perfect or present simple for current trends: 'in recent years' with present perfect is common, but 'I don't think so in recent years' is acceptable here; better: 'because many people have their own vehicles.' Avoid 'will' which indicates future. Also add commas and 'so' for clarity.

× Private vehicles umm well but we can see a lot of shared bikes near the stations especially subway stations.

✓ Private vehicles are common, but we can see a lot of shared bikes near stations, especially subway stations.

Add verb 'are' to complete the clause and use 'near stations' without 'the' when speaking generally. Insert comma before 'especially' for clarity. 'Private vehicles' needs a verb to form a full sentence. Suggestion: use complete clauses and proper punctuation.