Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), remove fillers, and give a clear concise response with one topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words and specific information (e.g., age, style, where you rode it). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought me a bright red mountain bike when I was seven, and I rode it to the park and around the neighborhood every weekend.

提案: Make the answer more structured: start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and an example. Remove repetitions and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Mention different groups who use bikes and contexts (commuting, exercise).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and to go to school. For example, I used to cycle to school every day, and I often see office workers and students riding bikes in the city because it's cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, uh, my father bought bought a cool bike for me I. When I was a child, I.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought a cool bike for me.

Original uses present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child', causing tense inconsistency (Present tense issue). Use past simple 'had' to match past time. Also remove duplicate word 'bought' and fix word order and sentence fragments to form two clear sentences. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions in the past (had, bought).

× Yes, I think so. The bikes are popular in my country because I I always use a bike for for going to the school and when I ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are popular in my country because I always used a bike to go to school when I was a student.

The student mixes present and past habits. The question asks generally about popularity now, but the reason refers to the student's past habit. Use past simple 'used' and 'was' to describe past habit, and 'to go to school' is the correct infinitive structure. Remove repeated words and unnecessary articles ('the school' -> 'school').

× A lot of people use bike also bikes, that's why bikes.

✓ A lot of people also use bikes, so bikes are popular.

Original has singular/plural inconsistency and awkward structure (Singular and plural issue). Use plural 'bikes' to match 'a lot of people' and a clearer connector 'so' to express consequence. Remove redundant words and make a complete sentence.