Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct response and a clear topic sentence. To improve, make the answer slightly more concise and add one specific detail (e.g., how you used the bike or a memory) using a linking phrase. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and avoid redundancy like “I remember so well” + “when I was a kid.”

例: Yes, I did. My grandmother bought me a pink bicycle when I was six, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the park near my house. Because the park was safe and quiet, I quickly learned to balance and gained a lot of confidence.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is repetitive and could be more specific. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two concrete reasons or examples, and use linking words (for example, however, because) to make your argument coherent. Avoid repeating “I think” multiple times.

例: Not really. Bicycles are less popular than buses and motorbikes in my hometown because public transport is frequent and convenient. For example, there are many bus routes and stops nearby, so most people prefer buses for daily commutes.

× I remember so well that when I was a kid I had a pink bicycle that was bought by my grandmother for me.

✓ I remember so well that when I was a kid I had a pink bicycle that my grandmother bought for me.

The original sentence uses 'was bought,' a past passive form. While grammatically acceptable, using the active past simple 'my grandmother bought' is more natural and concise in this context and fits the narrative voice. Suggestion: prefer active past simple when the actor is specified (subject + verb in past simple).

× Well, for me, I don't think so.

✓ Well, I don't think so.

The phrase 'for me' is not ungrammatical but is redundant with 'I think.' Removing 'for me' makes the sentence more concise and natural. If emphasis on personal opinion is needed, keep only one marker: either 'For me' or 'I don't think so.'

× I think bikes are less popular than other types of transportation.

✓ I think bicycles are less popular than other types of transportation.

The word 'bikes' is plural and acceptable, but in more formal speech 'bicycles' is preferable. This is a stylistic rather than strict grammatical correction. No change in number is required; suggestion improves register.

× For example, in my hometown there are numerous bus stops, so I think it's more popular.

✓ For example, in my hometown there are numerous bus stops, so I think buses are more popular.

The original sentence ends with 'it's more popular,' where the pronoun 'it' ambiguously refers to 'bikes' or 'bus stops.' Replacing 'it's' with 'buses are' clarifies the subject and ensures subject-verb agreement. Use a clear noun or plural pronoun to match the intended comparison.