Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep it to under five sentences. Also add a brief description or memory to make it more vivid.

例: Yes, I did. It was actually a four-wheeled tricycle that I used until I was seven, and I often rode it with my neighbourhood friends. For example, we would race down the small hill near my house, which made those afternoons very memorable.

提案: Be more direct and organised: give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Remove filler words (“well”, “umm”) and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a short comparison or consequence to enrich the answer.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is because most people prefer public transport like buses and the subway, so you rarely see cyclists on main roads. As a result, cycling is less common and often considered unsafe due to heavy traffic and few bike lanes.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was a four wheeled tricycle and I often rode bikes with my friends and I think it was a wonderful time.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was a four-wheeled tricycle, and I often rode bicycles with my friends; I think it was a wonderful time.

Multiple issues: 'four wheeled' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective before a noun ('four-wheeled tricycle'). 'Rode bikes' is acceptable but for formality 'rode bicycles' is clearer and avoids plural informality; also run-on sentence: coordinate clauses should be joined with commas and conjunctions or separated; replacing the second 'and' with a semicolon or comma improves clarity. Subject-verb agreement category is chosen because the sentence contains clause linking errors and agreement between compound modifiers and nouns can affect grammar consistency. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives, choose consistent vocabulary, and break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× Well, I don't really think bikes are popular in my country. I think people usually take buses or subway.

✓ Well, I don't really think bikes are popular in my country. I think people usually take buses or the subway.

Use of the noun 'subway' usually requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific public transit system ('the subway'). Also plural 'buses' is fine. The error falls under incorrect preposition/article/pronoun use; here adding 'the' makes the sentence natural. Suggestion: use 'the subway' when speaking of a known transit system in the country.

× Umm, I don't really see a lot of people riding bicycles on the streets.

✓ Umm, I don't really see a lot of people riding bicycles on the street.

'On the streets' is not strictly wrong, but 'on the street' is more idiomatic when speaking generally about traffic on roads. This relates to choice of noun form and prepositional phrase; categorized as present participle because 'riding' is a present participle phrase describing ongoing action. Suggestion: prefer 'on the street' for general statements; keep 'riding bicycles' as the correct present participle construction.

× Maybe that's not really safe on the road, I think.

✓ Maybe that's not really safe on the road, I think so.

The original has awkward tag at the end 'I think.' Ending with 'I think so' or rephrasing as 'I don't think it's really safe on the road' is clearer. This is a sentence structure issue: the clause ordering and final fragment are unnatural. Suggestion: use 'I think so' or reword to 'I don't think it's really safe on the road' for clearer meaning.