Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and simpler, clearer phrasing. Start with a topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use past simple: 'I had', 'I rode') and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day, usually with my friends, and we would explore the neighborhood or race in the park.

提案: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words. Fix vocabulary and pronunciation mistakes ("bats" -> "bikes"), use clear reasons and specific examples. Keep it concise: one topic sentence and one or two detailed supporting sentences with linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

例: Definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many farmers use bicycles to travel short distances to the fields, and students often cycle to school to save money on transport.

× Yes, in my childhood I do have a bike and I ride it daily even though I do always with my friends.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I had a bike and I rode it daily, and I always rode it with my friends.

The student mixes present tense auxiliary 'do' with past context 'in my childhood'. Use simple past 'had' and 'rode' for past habits. Remove incorrect 'do always' and place 'always' before the verb. Suggestion: use simple past for actions that occurred regularly in the past (I had, I rode, I always rode).

× Definitely yes. Uh bats are a popular in my country, uh, mostly people uh, like the farmers prefer to go on a ride uh, to their food even though some students use bike uh to go to school.

✓ Definitely yes. Bikes are popular in my country. Mostly people, such as farmers, prefer to use them to go to their farms, and some students use bikes to go to school.

Multiple errors: 'bats' is incorrect word choice and 'a popular' mixes singular article with a plural noun. Replace with plural 'bikes are popular'. Also 'use bike' should be 'use bikes' or 'use them'. 'Go to their food' is likely 'go to their farms' — correct the noun. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and keep number agreement between articles/adjectives and nouns (no 'a' before plural), and ensure plural consistency (bikes, them).