Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Уменьшите количество заполняющих пауз («uh», «um») и постройте более плавный ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретикой. Используйте связку для логичности (например, "but", "so", "because"). Также соблюдайте ограничение по длине (максимум 5 предложений).

例: I didn't have my own bike as a child, but my brother did, so I often borrowed his to ride with him. We usually rode in the park on weekends, which helped me learn balance and enjoy outdoor activities.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более уверенно и завершённо: начните с общей позиции, затем приведите причину и закончите примером или контрастом. Избегайте незавершённых фраз и общего «can be» без пояснений. Добавьте конкретные детали (процент, места, поведение молодых людей).

例: Bicycles are not very popular for commuting in my country because public transport and cars are more convenient in cities. However, many young people use bikes for leisure and short trips, especially in university neighborhoods and parks.

× I used to, uh, cycle with, uh, his bike.

✓ I used to, uh, cycle on his bike.

The correct preposition with 'cycle' when referring to the bicycle you ride is 'on', not 'with'. Use 'cycle on his bike' to indicate riding that bike. Also remove the extra comma and filler words for clarity: 'I used to cycle on his bike.'

× Well, in my country people don't use their bikes for commutes, for example going to school, university or work.

✓ Well, in my country people don't use their bikes for commuting, for example for going to school, university, or work.

The noun 'commutes' is awkward here; use the gerund 'commuting' after 'for' to express purpose. Also add 'for' before the examples and include commas in the list. Correct structure: 'use their bikes for commuting, for example for going to...'.

× Usually people choose buses or car for commuting, but among youngsters bikes can be.

✓ Usually people choose buses or cars for commuting, but among youngsters, bikes can be popular.

Parallel nouns need matching number: 'buses or cars' not 'buses or car'. Also add 'popular' to complete the sentence 'bikes can be', and include a comma after the introductory phrase. The corrected sentence: 'Usually people choose buses or cars for commuting, but among youngsters, bikes can be popular.'