Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a direct, concise response (1-2 sentences) with a topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use natural phrasing and avoid repetition. For example, state whether you had a bike, then briefly describe it or say how often you used it, using a linking phrase like “and” or “so”.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small blue bicycle with training wheels when I was six, and I rode it to visit my friends almost every weekend.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is informal and slightly unclear. Improve by using clearer linking words, more precise vocabulary, and one specific reason or example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers like “like.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many cities have heavy traffic, so people choose cycling as an affordable and eco-friendly way to travel. For instance, in my city there are several bike lanes and shared-bike services that many commuters use.

× Yes, I guess so 'cause I think there are many people in my country and cycling is one of the like environmental friendly transport.

✓ Yes, I guess so because I think there are many people in my country, and cycling is one of the environmentally friendly means of transport.

The sentence has several issues that match 'Incorrect use of conjunction' and also other categories listed but per instructions only correct those that meet the provided list: replace informal conjunction ''cause' with the full conjunction 'because' for formality and clarity; add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses; 'the like' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here so it is removed; 'environmental friendly' is an incorrect adjective form - it should be the adverbial form 'environmentally' modifying 'friendly', forming the compound adjective 'environmentally friendly'; 'transport' as a countable concept is better expressed here as 'means of transport' to be natural in English. Suggestion for improvement: avoid contractions like ''cause' in formal speech, ensure modifiers use correct form (adverb + adjective), and remove filler phrases such as 'the like'.