Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Provide a fuller, natural response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who gave it to you, when you used it) using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid one-word answers to show fluency.

例: Yes, I did — I had a bright red bicycle when I was about eight. It was a simple single-speed bike that my parents bought for me, and I used it every day to ride to school and visit friends. I also spent weekends practicing tricks in the park, which helped me become more confident on two wheels.

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: begin with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked logically (use linking words like 'because' and 'so' or 'therefore'). Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., 'too much higher' → 'very high').

例: Yes, motorcycles and scooters are very popular in my country because fuel prices are very high and parking is limited in cities. As a result, many people choose bikes since they are cheaper to run and easier to park, especially for short commutes.

× Yes they are popular in our country because the fuel prices are too much higher in our country that's why people prefer to have bikes rather than bigger vehicles.

✓ Yes, they are popular in our country because fuel prices are much higher here, so people prefer bikes to larger vehicles.

The original sentence contains multiple issues: 'too much higher' is ungrammatical; use 'much higher' to modify comparative 'higher'. Repeating 'in our country' is redundant; replace second occurrence with 'here' or remove it. 'That's why' is conversationally acceptable but creates a run-on sentence when joined with the previous clause; use a comma and coordinating conjunction 'so' to join ideas. Use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'prefer to have X rather than Y' for clearer comparison. Also add commas after introductory 'Yes' and before coordinating conjunctions for clarity. Suggested improvements: use 'much higher' for degree with comparative, avoid repetition, join clauses properly with punctuation and conjunctions, and use the correct comparative construction 'prefer A to B'.