Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Expand your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to make it coherent. For example, mention when you got the bike, who gave it to you, where you rode it, or a brief memory to make the response more engaging and natural. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. It was a small blue bicycle my parents gave me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood park every afternoon. I remember practicing until I could ride without training wheels, which made me feel very proud.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and then add specific supporting details with linking words to explain why and for whom bikes are popular. Mention factors such as culture, infrastructure, or examples (children, commuters, sports) to show breadth. Keep the answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and students. For example, many families encourage kids to cycle for exercise, and in some cities cycling is common for short commutes because there are bike lanes and affordable bikes available.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country among children.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular among children in my country.

The adverbial phrase 'among children' is better placed closer to the verb phrase 'are popular' to clearly indicate who finds bikes popular. Placing 'in my country' at the end improves natural word order and clarity. Suggestion: move the phrase that indicates the group ('among children') next to the adjective 'popular' and keep location ('in my country') after it for smoother, more natural English.