Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تكون إجاباتك أكثر تنظيماً ونحوياً صحيحة. ابدأ بجملة موضوعية مباشرة (نعم/لا + تفاصيل موجزة)، ثم أضف تفاصيل داعمة مترابطة باستخدام روابط مثل “because” أو “for example”. انتبه لاستخدام الأزمنة الصحيحة (مثلاً “I had” بدل “I have” للحديث عن الماضي) ولتقليل التكرار والأخطاء في النطق. قدم مثالاً واحداً محدداً عن مكان أو نشاط (مثلاً اسم الحديقة وأنواع الألعاب) بدل العبارات الغامضة والمتكررة.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was eleven. I used it mainly to play sports and ride in Shaheed Garden because it had wide paths and a safe cycling area. For example, I often rode there with friends on weekends.

提案: اجب بجملة واضحة ومباشرة ثم قدّم سبباً محدداً مدعوماً بتفاصيل. استخدم تراكيب صحيحة للعبارات عن السياسات أو التغييرات (“the government is building” أو “the government has built”) وتجنّب التكرار. استعمل أدوات ربط مثل “because”, “for example”, أو “so” لشرح السبب وكيف يؤثر ذلك على شعبية الدراجات. أذكر أمثلة محددة عن المرافق أو الإحصاءات إن أمكن.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular now because the government has been building new recreational areas with cycling paths. For example, Shaheed Garden has wide lanes and basketball courts, so many families go there to cycle on weekends.

× Yes, sure, when I was 11 years old, I have a pack, but I I play play sport.

✓ Yes, sure. When I was 11 years old, I had a bike, but I didn't play sports.

The student mixed present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was 11 years old'. Use past tense 'had'. Also used present simple 'I play' incorrectly for a past habitual negative; use 'didn't play' and plural 'sports'. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or states that occurred in the past and use did + not for past negatives.

× For example, sometime, sometime I go in the garden Shaheed go play sport.

✓ For example, sometimes I went to Shahid's garden to play sports.

Sentence is ungrammatical and mixes tenses and word order. 'Sometime, sometime' should be 'sometimes'. With past context, use past simple 'went'. 'Go in the garden' should be 'went to the garden' and a proper possessive/name 'Shahid's garden'. 'Play sport' should be plural 'play sports'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' for habitual actions, correct preposition 'to' with 'garden', and past simple for past habits.

× Yes, of course, because the government he building a new region, he can, he can people play basket, play bike in the area sometime, for example, sometime I go in the garden Shahid, the area is very good.

✓ Yes, of course, because the government is building a new area, and people can play basketball and ride bikes there sometimes. For example, sometimes I go to Shahid's garden; the area is very good.

Multiple tense and grammar problems: 'the government he building' incorrectly inserts pronoun and wrong verb form; use present continuous 'is building' with the noun subject 'the government' (no extra pronoun). 'He can, he can people' is incorrect — use 'people can'. 'Play basket' should be 'play basketball' and 'play bike' should be 'ride bikes' or 'cycle'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Use 'go to Shahid's garden' with preposition 'to' and possessive. Suggestion: remove unnecessary pronouns, use correct continuous tense for ongoing actions, use modal 'can' correctly with subject, and correct lexical choices for activities.

× the government he building a new region, he can, he can people play basket, play bike in the area sometime

✓ the government is building a new area, and people can play basketball and ride bikes in the area sometimes

Using 'he' to refer to 'the government' is incorrect in English; 'the government' is a noun that takes verbs directly. Also the repeated 'he can, he can people' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: omit 'he' and use the verb form that matches the subject; use 'people can' to express ability.