Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence and richness by adding a clear topic sentence, using linking words, and providing one or two specific details (e.g., your age when you first learned or a memorable event). Avoid repeating phrases like “to school and back to school.” Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I grew up in the countryside and used to cycle to school every day, which took about twenty minutes each way. Because the route ran along the coast, I often remember the fresh sea breeze and a particular spring morning when I and my friends raced to class.

提案: Good content and clear opinion, but improve fluency by combining sentences and removing repetition. Use linking words (for example, ‘because’ and ‘so’) and give one specific example or statistic about bike-sharing to strengthen the answer. Watch minor grammar issues like extra words (“in the in our country”).

例: Yes, definitely — bikes are very popular in my country because there are extensive cycling lanes and affordable bike-sharing systems. For instance, you can use a smartphone app to unlock a bike almost anywhere in the city, which makes commuting convenient and reduces traffic congestion.

× I remember cycling to school and back to school with my bike, enjoying the sea breeze and the scenery.

✓ I remember cycling to school and back with my bike, enjoying the sea breeze and the scenery.

The phrase 'to school and back to school' is redundant. Use 'to school and back' or 'to and from school'. This is not a tense issue but a wording/structure issue; using 'back' alone avoids repetition and keeps the gerund 'cycling' correctly used.

× Bikes are very popular in my country because cycling lanes are everywhere and bicycles are very accessible to people living in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because cycling lanes are everywhere and bicycles are very accessible to people living in my country.

No grammatical preposition error here; sentence is acceptable. No correction needed. Note: You asked only to correct mistakes that match the provided list; this sentence is correct as written.

× We can simply use an app and borrow a bike anywhere in the in our country and we can return it.

✓ We can simply use an app to borrow a bike anywhere in our country and return it.

The original sentence contains a duplicated preposition 'in the in our country' which is incorrect. Use 'in our country' or 'anywhere in the country'. Also, 'use an app and borrow a bike' is clearer as 'use an app to borrow a bike', which correctly links purpose with 'to' and avoids awkward repetition; 'and return it' is sufficient without repeating 'we can'.