Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be consistent in tense and give a clear, natural response with one topic sentence and a short supporting detail. Use past tense for childhood and avoid repeating negatives awkwardly. For example, start with 'No, I didn't.' then add a brief reason or contrast in one or two short sentences using a linking word.

例: No, I didn't. I grew up in a small apartment and my parents couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or used public transport.

提案: Improve grammar, word choice and sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, because/so/therefore) and give specific supporting details. Use correct adjectives and fixed phrases (e.g., 'in high demand', 'very convenient'). Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

例: I'm not sure about the whole country, but in my city bikes are very popular. They are in high demand because they are affordable and practical, especially with heavy traffic, so many people prefer them for short trips.

× No, I don't. I didn't have a bike in my childhood.

✓ No, I didn't. I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student mixes present simple 'I don't' with a past context. The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so use past tense consistently. Also 'in my childhood' is grammatically acceptable but 'when I was a child' is more natural. Suggestion: Remove 'I don't' and use 'I didn't' and prefer 'when I was a child' for clarity.

× I'm not sure about the whole country but here in my city bike is very popular and demandable because it's easy to afford and in a traffic city so it's very convenience.

✓ I'm not sure about the whole country, but here in my city bikes are very popular and in demand because they are easy to afford and, in a city with heavy traffic, very convenient.

Multiple issues fall under subject-verb agreement and related word form errors: 'bike is' should be 'bikes are' to agree with plural 'bikes'; 'demandable' is incorrect in this context—use 'in demand'; 'it's easy to afford' should refer to 'they' (bikes), so use 'they are'; 'convenience' is a noun, but the adjective 'convenient' is needed. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural subjects with plural verbs, choose correct adjective forms, and maintain pronoun agreement.