Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and keep sentence length under five. For example, explain cultural restrictions briefly and the personal consequence (never learned to ride).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because in my community girls were not allowed to ride. As a result, I never learned how to ride a bicycle.

提案: Be more precise and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific reasons linked smoothly (for example: affordability and convenience). Correct word choices (e.g., "daily chores" or "commutes" instead of "daily shows") and use plural/singular consistently. Keep it within four sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and practical. Many people, especially men, use them for daily commutes and running errands, and they are ideal for short trips in crowded cities.

× Is I'm living and currently in the society where girls are not allowed to ride a bike from a young age.

✓ I am living in a society where girls are not allowed to ride bikes from a young age.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and an unnecessary auxiliary 'Is' before 'I'm'. 'I'm living and currently in the society' mixes present continuous with an extra preposition. Use 'I am living in a society' or simply 'I live in a society'. Also change 'a bike' to 'bikes' because we are speaking generally about girls and riding in plural. Suggestion: say 'I live in a society where girls are not allowed to ride bikes from a young age.' Use present simple ('I live') for general facts or present continuous ('I am living') for temporary situations; keep word order subject + verb + complement and remove extra 'Is'.

× So my answer will be not I don't even know how to ride a bike.

✓ So my answer is that I don't even know how to ride a bike.

The original mixes future marker 'will be' with a negative and has incorrect word order 'not I don't'. Use a clear reporting phrase: 'my answer is that' followed by the clause 'I don't even know how to ride a bike.' This fixes sentence structure and avoids double negation. Also use 'a bike' correctly here because it refers to the student's ability with any one bike. Suggestion: Use 'My answer is that I don't even know how to ride a bike.' or simply 'I don't even know how to ride a bike.'

× Yes, bikes are so popular in our country because it is a very easy way of transportation.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because they are an easy form of transportation.

The clause 'it is a very easy way of transportation' is incorrect because 'bikes' is plural and requires a plural pronoun 'they' and 'form of transportation' is a more natural collocation than 'way of transportation.' Also avoid 'so popular' in formal responses; use 'very popular' or 'quite popular.' Suggestion: 'Bikes are very popular in our country because they are an easy and inexpensive form of transportation.'

× Men use it for their daily shows from going one place to another and it is also cheap.

✓ Men use them for their daily journeys to go from one place to another, and they are also inexpensive.

The original uses 'it' to refer to 'bikes' (plural), so the correct pronoun is 'them' or 'they.' 'Daily shows' is incorrect word choice; the intended meaning is 'daily journeys' or 'daily commute.' Also 'cheap' is informal; 'inexpensive' is better in this context. Maintain consistent plural agreement: 'Men use them ... and they are also inexpensive.' Suggestion: 'Men use them for their daily commutes from one place to another, and they are also inexpensive.'