Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question (Yes/No) and then give one or two brief supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Keep it natural and no more than 3–4 short sentences. Mention who prevented you (e.g., parents), why (safety or rules), and a brief consequence (how you got around).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents were very strict about safety. As a result, they didn’t allow me to ride on the road, so I usually walked or took public transport to school.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but has grammar and word-choice errors and is repetitive. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so, and). Use correct nouns and plural forms and avoid repeating phrases. Provide a brief example or contrast to strengthen the answer.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work and to avoid traffic, so bikes are more practical than cars in crowded cities.

× When I am child because I belong very strict to family.

✓ When I was a child, my family was very strict with me.

Errors: incorrect tense (used present 'am' instead of past 'was'), incorrect verb 'belong' used for relationship/possession, and awkward phrase 'very strict to family'. Correction: change to past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child', use 'my family was very strict with me' to show the family being strict toward the speaker. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations and common collocations like 'strict with someone'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, this Bikes are very popular in our country because we can, because we can travel in everywhere with biker rather than car.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because we can travel everywhere by bike rather than by car.

Errors: unnecessary demonstrative article 'this' with plural noun, incorrect capitalization 'Bikes', awkward repetition 'because we can, because we can', incorrect preposition 'in everywhere', wrong noun 'biker' (person) instead of 'bike' (vehicle), and missing article with 'car'. Corrections: remove 'this' and lowercase 'bikes', use 'travel everywhere' (no 'in'), use 'by bike' and 'by car' for means of transport. Suggestion: use correct articles with countable nouns, use 'by' for modes of transport and avoid repeating phrases. Grammar problem type ID:22