Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and slightly longer with one supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then add a brief reason. Use correct verb forms and simple linking words.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because my family couldn’t afford one at the time, I usually walked or took the bus to school. As a result, I didn’t learn to ride until I was a teenager.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct grammar (subject–verb agreement) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., cycling, bike rides, organization). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, my brother runs a community cycling group that organizes regular city rides to promote healthy living and eco-friendly transport. Because of initiatives like his, cycling is becoming more common in urban areas.

× Actually, I don't have and I haven't had the bike before because we're we don't have enough money.

✓ Actually, I didn't have a bike and I have never had one before because we didn't have enough money.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so past tense should be used. The student mixed present simple ('I don't have') and present perfect ('I haven't had') with an incorrect structure. Use past simple 'didn't have' for a completed state in childhood and present perfect 'have never had' could be used for experience up to now, but to match the time reference 'when you were a child' use past simple consistently: 'I didn't have a bike' or 'I never had a bike.' Also correct article use ('a bike') and pronoun/auxiliary repetition ('we're we don't' is incorrect) changed to 'we didn't.' Replace 'the bike' with 'a bike' or 'one' because it's non-specific.

× Yes, it is very popular and actually my brother, he had this organic organization where they do ride bikings around our city.

✓ Yes, they are very popular and actually my brother had an organization that organized bike rides around our city.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they are' not 'it is.' Also 'my brother, he had' is redundant; use 'my brother had.' The phrase 'organic organization' is likely incorrect in meaning; 'organization' alone or 'community organization' is better. 'Do ride bikings' is ungrammatical: use 'organized bike rides' or 'organized rides' (noun) or 'organize bike rides' (verb). 'Biking' is an uncountable gerund; 'bike rides' is the correct noun phrase. Ensure past tense 'had' matches context.