Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give a brief reason or memory. Use linking words and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around our yard because it made me feel independent, and I remember practicing until I could ride without training wheels.

提案: Give a direct, concise opinion and support it with two clear, specific reasons linked logically. Use correct grammar and linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Avoid vague phrases like 'very less'.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for long-distance travel. Also, there is limited cycling infrastructure in many cities, which makes biking impractical and less safe.

× Yes, I have a bike, a red bike when I was a child and I love to drive this bike around the the house.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, a red bike, when I was a child and I loved to ride this bike around the house.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence starts by referring to childhood, so past tense should be used (had, loved). 'Have' and 'love' are present tense and do not match the time frame. Word choice: use 'ride' instead of 'drive' for a bicycle. Extra word 'the' is repeated. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past tense when talking about past experiences and use appropriate verb for bicycles ('ride').

× No, because most people here use cars to travel from place to another and I think the bike when is used very less because there is no place for the bike and we have a long distance.

✓ No, because most people here use cars to travel from one place to another, and I think bikes are used much less because there is no space for them and distances are long.

Multiple preposition and phrasing errors: 'from place to another' should be 'from one place to another'. 'The bike when is used very less' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'bikes are used much less' (plural and passive/average frequency expression). 'No place for the bike' better as 'no space for them' (plural pronoun agreement). 'We have a long distance' should be 'distances are long' to express general condition. Suggestions: use standard idiomatic prepositions ('from one place to another'), maintain consistent number (bikes/them), and rephrase awkward clauses into natural English.