Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, loại bỏ lỗi lắp và trùng từ, và làm câu mạch lạc hơn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nơi bạn đi, ai cùng đi) bằng các liên từ phù hợp. Chú ý thì (used to) và tránh lặp từ như “I could I could”.

例: I used to have a small bicycle which I rode every afternoon with my friends around our neighborhood. It made me feel free and happy because I could explore nearby streets and visit the park, so I spent a lot of time outdoors.

提案: Cần chỉnh ngữ âm và chính tả (buys → bikes), cải thiện cấu trúc câu và dùng lý do cụ thể hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do với liên từ (for example, because) và tránh cấu trúc ngược như "the people who have not high salary" — thay bằng "people with low incomes" hoặc "those on low salaries".

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people with low incomes use bicycles for short trips to work or the market, and they are also practical in crowded urban areas.

× I it's made me feel free and happy because it could I could explore new place and enjoy time outside.

✓ It made me feel free and happy because I could explore new places and enjoy time outside.

The sentence mixes tenses and has word order errors. Use simple past 'made' to match 'used to have' (past habit). Remove the extraneous 'it's'. 'I could' was duplicated; keep one. Use plural 'places' for generality. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and correct word order: 'It made me feel... because I could...'.

× I it's made me feel free and happy because it could I could explore new place and enjoy time outside.

✓ It made me feel free and happy because I could explore new places and enjoy time outside.

'Place' should be plural 'places' when referring to exploring various locations. Use plural for general, countable nouns when speaking nonspecifically about multiple items. Suggestion: use 'new places' or 'a new place' depending on meaning.

× I it's made me feel free and happy because it could I could explore new place and enjoy time outside.

✓ It made me feel free and happy because I could explore new places and enjoy time outside.

The original has incorrect structure and extra words ('I it's', 'it could I could') causing confusion. Simplify to a clear clause sequence: subject + verb + object, then reason clause. Suggestion: remove redundant words and reorder to 'It made me feel... because I could...'.

× Yes I do. Buys are popular in my country because it is convenient and the people who have not high salary can afford to buy it.

✓ Yes, I do. Bikes are popular in my country because they are convenient and people with low salaries can afford to buy them.

'Buys' is a typo for 'bikes'. Use 'they' to agree with plural 'bikes'. 'It is convenient' should be 'they are convenient'. 'The people who have not high salary' is awkward; use 'people with low salaries'. Also 'buy it' should be 'buy them' to match plural. Suggestion: correct typos, ensure pronoun and verb agreement, and use natural phrasing for income expressions.

× Yes I do. Buys are popular in my country because it is convenient and the people who have not high salary can afford to buy it.

✓ Yes, I do. Bikes are popular in my country because they are convenient and people with low salaries can afford to buy them.

'It is convenient' disagrees with plural subject 'bikes'; use 'they are convenient'. Pronouns and verbs must agree in number. Suggestion: ensure verbs and pronouns match the subject number (singular/plural).