Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and direct. Start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct tense and simple, accurate vocabulary; avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “feel not the type”, “one line”, “write a file”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, and check grammar for age reference and learning experience.

例: Yes. My father bought me a bicycle when I was ten. I learned to ride it in a nearby park over a few afternoons, and I remember being proud when I could ride without help. The bike was my main way to travel to a friend’s house after school.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No/Somewhat), then explain with concrete details and linking words (for example, because, however). Avoid unrelated or confusing words and provide a realistic range or examples (e.g. distances, purposes). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I think bicycles are somewhat popular but mostly for short trips. For example, many people ride them to school or nearby shops within one to five kilometers because public transport or cars are more common for longer journeys.

× Yeah, I feel not the type.

✓ Yeah, I wasn't really that type.

The original uses present tense 'feel' while referring to a past situation; use past 'wasn't'. Also 'not the type' is informal and missing 'really' for natural meaning. Suggestion: use past tense for past situations and a natural phrase: 'I wasn't really that type.'

× When I was a child, my father bought me one when I was like, I'm 10 years old and I took like a one line to learn how to write a file.

✓ When I was a child, my father bought me one when I was about 10 years old, and I took one lesson to learn how to ride it.

Multiple issues: tense and time clause should be past ('I was about 10 years old') rather than mixing present 'I'm'. 'Took like a one line' is incorrect; likely meant 'took one lesson'. 'Write a file' is inappropriate for a bike; likely 'ride it'. Use consistent past tense and correct noun phrases: 'about 10 years old', 'one lesson', 'ride it.'

× Oh wow. I think it's not really that popular.

✓ Oh wow. I don't think they're really that popular.

Question asked about bikes (plural). Use plural pronoun 'they' and present simple 'don't think' to state an opinion. 'It's' refers singular; change to 'they're' or 'bikes are'.

× Uh, it's often popular music to jazz, to school and about US one to five kilometers.

✓ Uh, they're often popular for short trips to school, about one to five kilometers.

Original is unintelligible: 'popular music to jazz' is incorrect. Likely meaning 'popular for commuting to school'. Use plural 'they're', remove unrelated words, and express distance clearly: 'about one to five kilometers.' Use 'for short trips to school' to convey common usage.