Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Evita repetir exactamente la misma información y amplía la respuesta con un detalle concreto y natural. Por ejemplo, comienza con una oración que responda directamente y luego añade una o dos frases breves con información específica (qué tipo de bicicleta era, con quién la usabas o un recuerdo). Mantén un máximo de 5 oraciones y usa conectores simples como "and" o "so" para mayor fluidez.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bike with training wheels when I was about six. I often rode it to the park with my older brother, and I remember learning to balance without the training wheels over one summer.

提案: Organiza la respuesta en una oración tema clara y luego añade razones específicas y conectadas con enlaces simples. Evita oraciones fragmentadas y repeticiones (por ejemplo "I like"). Sé más preciso sobre la popularidad (quiénes las usan y por qué) y menciona una consecuencia o ejemplo concreto. Mantén la respuesta breve y coherente.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities and among students. Many people use them for commuting because they are cheap and fast, and I personally ride one for exercise and to avoid traffic.

× Yes, it is.

✓ Yes, they are.

The student is referring to 'bikes' (plural). The verb 'to be' must agree in number with the subject; for plural subjects use 'are' rather than 'is'. Also 'it' is incorrect pronoun for plural noun; use 'they'. Suggestion: identify the subject's number and match pronoun and verb accordingly.

× Actually. Right now I have a bike because I like that.

✓ Actually, right now I have a bike because I like it.

The fragment 'Actually.' is a sentence fragment; combine with the next clause for natural speech. The pronoun 'that' is not the correct reference for liking a bike; use 'it' to refer to 'a bike'. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and use 'it' to refer back to a singular noun.

× I like the sport, I like the way that the bike feels to me and it's good for my health.

✓ I like the sport; I like the way the bike feels to me, and it is good for my health.

Run-on sentence uses commas where stronger punctuation helps. 'That' is optional but can be omitted for smoother English: 'the way the bike feels to me.' Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speaking, but for formality use 'it is'. Suggestion: use semicolon or separate clauses with conjunctions and ensure pronoun references are clear.