Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence using past tense (e.g., "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child."). Then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "It was a small black bike that my cousin gave me, and I used it to ride to school every day"). Keep it to no more than 4–5 sentences and avoid redundant words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small black bicycle that my cousin gave me. I loved riding it around my neighborhood, and I often used it to go to my friends' houses. Because it was lightweight, I could easily carry it up the stairs when needed.

提案: Use consistent tense and complete sentences. Start with a direct opinion sentence (e.g., "Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in my country"). Then give specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because" and "so"). Provide one concrete example or trend and avoid fragmented clauses.

例: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in my country because fuel prices have risen a lot. As a result, many people choose bicycles for short trips and commuting. For example, my neighbors now ride bikes to the market instead of driving their cars.

× Yes, I do have a bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. Using 'do have' is present-tense and mismatches the time frame. Use 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference in the question (use past simple for past events).

× When I was a kid it was a small black bicycle came from my cousin.

✓ When I was a kid, it was a small black bicycle that came from my cousin.

This sentence combines two clauses incorrectly. A relative pronoun (that/which) is needed to link 'bicycle' and 'came from my cousin'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Alternatively, rephrase to 'When I was a kid, I had a small black bicycle that came from my cousin.' Suggestion: use a relative pronoun to join clauses or restructure as separate sentences; ensure punctuation after introductory phrases.

× Well, before having a bicycle isn't that popular, but because of gasoline are way expensive nowadays, we decided or a lot of people decided to get.

✓ Well, before, having a bicycle wasn't that popular, but because gasoline is very expensive nowadays, many people decided to get one.

Multiple errors: tense and subject-verb agreement ('isn't' should be 'wasn't' to talk about the past trend), word order and auxiliary usage, subject-verb agreement in 'gasoline are' should be 'gasoline is' (gasoline is uncountable singular), and missing object after 'get' (use 'get one'). Also 'way expensive' is informal; use 'very expensive'. The corrected sentence matches past and present ideas: past trend (wasn't popular) and current reason (gasoline is expensive) leading to people's decision (decided). Suggestion: keep consistent tense for each time frame, ensure subject-verb agreement, and include necessary objects (one) or nouns.