Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (remove extra words and correct verb forms), tighten sentences to avoid redundancy, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school every day, and I loved its bright red frame because it made me feel proud and confident. For example, I would race my friends to the park after class, which helped me build stamina and independence.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'bikes' not 'buys'), avoid filler words (uh), and provide clearer, more specific supporting details with linking words to explain why bikes are popular. Limit to 2–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many students and commuters use them for short trips. In particular, elementary and high-school students often cycle to school since it's cheaper and faster than taking public transport, and bike lanes in cities make cycling safer.

× I used to ride it to school every day and I loved its bright red frame because I it make me feel proud and confident as I pedaled around the neighborhood.

✓ I used to ride it to school every day and I loved its bright red frame because it made me feel proud and confident as I pedaled around the neighborhood.

Problems: 'I it make me' contains an incorrect pronoun placement and wrong verb tense/form. The pronoun 'it' should be the subject of 'made', and the past tense 'made' matches the past context 'used to' and 'loved'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'I', use 'it made' to show that the bike caused the feeling, and keep past tense for consistency. Note: This maps to Grammar Problem Type IDs 9 (Verb in the past participle form) and 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) but the primary fixes are correcting pronoun placement and using past tense 'made'.

× Uh, I think buys are popular in my country because every elementary student in high school use it to go to school and uh, I think it's so convenient for everyone.

✓ Uh, I think bikes are popular in my country because almost every school student uses them to go to school, and I think it's very convenient for everyone.

Problems: 'buys' is a typographical error for 'bikes' (spelling/word choice). 'every elementary student in high school' is unclear and contradictory — 'elementary' and 'high school' conflict; replace with 'almost every school student' for clarity. 'use it' has subject-verb agreement and number issues: with 'every student' the verb should be 'uses' (third person singular), and the object referring to 'bikes' should be plural 'them' or singular 'a bike'. Also 'go to go to' is a repetition and should be removed. Suggestion: correct spelling to 'bikes', clarify which students you mean, change verb to 'uses' for agreement, and use 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'.