Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did / No, I didn’t), give one or two brief supporting details, and avoid irrelevant or incorrect numbers. Use correct verb tense and word order. For example, say when you got the bike, who gave it to you, and how you felt, using linking words like “and” or “which”.

例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bicycle when I was about eight years old, and I still remember how excited I felt. It was a bright red bike with a small basket, which I used to ride to school and around the neighborhood.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and a short example. Use plural forms and correct articles (bikes, the majority). Use linking words like “because” or “for example” and avoid vague phrases. Also correct unclear phrases like “easy to carry” and “helps pedestrians” to more accurate ideas (cheap, convenient, saves time).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For example, many people commute to work or market on bikes, and they are also practical in crowded streets where cars would be slow.

× As remember when I was a child I had a bike my dad gifted me on my 20 on 618th birthday and that was very happiest moment for me.

✓ As I remember, when I was a child I had a bike my dad gifted me on my 20th birthday, and that was the happiest moment for me.

Errors: missing subject 'I' before 'remember'; incorrect ordinal '20 on 618th' and wrong form '20th'; unnecessary superlative 'very happiest' should be 'the happiest'; missing commas for clarity. Suggestions: include the subject 'I' with 'remember', use the correct ordinal '20th birthday', use the definite article with superlative 'the happiest', and add commas to separate clauses. This keeps the sentence in the past tense consistently and improves clarity.

× From my perspective, bike is very popular in my country because majority of people have the main mode of transport is bike.

✓ From my perspective, bikes are very popular in my country because the majority of people use bikes as their main mode of transport.

Errors: singular 'bike' mismatches context, verb agreement missing ('is' vs 'are'); ungrammatical clause 'have the main mode of transport is bike'. Suggestions: pluralize 'bikes' and use plural verb 'are'; rephrase second clause to 'the majority of people use bikes as their main mode of transport' for correct subject-verb agreement and idiomatic expression.

× Bike is very easy to carry and it helps to people of pedestrians people.

✓ Bikes are very easy to carry and they help pedestrians.

Errors: missing article or plural form 'Bikes' and incorrect pronoun agreement 'it' should be 'they'; awkward phrase 'helps to people of pedestrians people'. Suggestions: pluralize 'Bikes' and use 'they' for agreement; replace 'helps to people of pedestrians people' with the concise 'help pedestrians'. This corrects article/pronoun use and yields a natural sentence in present tense describing a general truth.