Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but a few improvements would raise your score. Shorten redundant phrasing (e.g., avoid repeating 'when I was a child' and 'when I was in 11th standard'), add one specific detail about the bike or a short memory to make the response more vivid, and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike. My parents bought it for me when I was in 11th grade as a reward for good grades. It was a bright red mountain bike, and I often rode it to my friend’s house or to the park to play after school.

提案: The answer addresses the question but has issues with word choice, coherence and minor errors. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., 'short communities' and 'use them to talk'), correct grammar (plural/singular, article use), and add a linking word to improve flow. Provide one specific example (e.g., commuting in cities or rural areas) to support your point. Keep to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, they are very popular. Bicycles and motorbikes are common because they’re affordable and economical to run, and they’re easy to park. For example, many office workers and students use motorbikes to commute in crowded cities because it saves time and money.

× My family gave it to me when I was in 11th standard as a reward for doing good at school, and I used to ride it to visit my friends and play outside.

✓ My family gave it to me when I was in 11th grade as a reward for doing well at school, and I used to ride it to visit my friends and play outside.

The phrase 'doing good' is ungrammatical in this context; 'doing well' correctly uses the adverb to modify the verb 'doing'. Also '11th standard' is nonstandard in many varieties of English; '11th grade' is the common equivalent. This sentence otherwise uses past tense appropriately. Suggestion: use adverbs (well) to modify verbs and use the locally appropriate term for school year.

× Bicycle and motorbikes are very popular in our country because they are inexpensive to buy and cheap to run.

✓ Bicycles and motorbikes are very popular in our country because they are inexpensive to buy and cheap to run.

The original mixes singular 'Bicycle' with plural 'motorbikes'. For parallel structure and agreement, both nouns should be plural when speaking generally: 'Bicycles and motorbikes'. Suggestion: make items in a list agree in number.

× They are convenient for short communities and easy to park.

✓ They are convenient for short journeys and easy to park.

The phrase 'short communities' is incorrect; likely the intended meaning is short trips or short journeys. Use 'for' with 'convenient for short journeys'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun ('journeys' or 'trips') and maintain prepositional phrase 'convenient for ...'.

× So many people use them to talk.

✓ So many people use them to commute.

'Use them to talk' is illogical in this context: bikes are used for transportation, not for talking. The intended meaning is likely 'to commute' or 'to travel'. This is a vocabulary/structure error that affects sentence meaning. Suggestion: replace 'talk' with a verb that matches the context, such as 'commute', 'travel', or 'get around'.

× Many people use them to travel to work.

✓ Many people use them to travel to work.

This sentence is grammatically correct: present simple is appropriate to state a general fact. No correction needed.