Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and word forms. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors: use ‘I had’ not ‘I have’, ‘when I was a child’ not ‘when I'm were a shy’, and ‘wanted me to practice’ instead of ‘want me to practice’. Keep it to 2–3 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father wanted me to practice riding it so I could go places with him, and I remember practicing in the park every weekend.

提案: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons with linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’. Correct mistakes: use ‘bikes’ not ‘buy’, ‘cost-effective’, ‘short trips’, and ‘commuting’. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and cost-effective for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or run errands since it saves money and avoids traffic.

× MMM yes I have a bike when I'm were a shy because my father want me to practice to ride a bike to go anywhere with him.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my father wanted me to practice riding a bike so I could go anywhere with him.

Errors: tense consistency and verb forms. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense 'had' not 'have' and 'was' not 'were'. 'I'm were a shy' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'I was a child'. 'Want' should be past 'wanted' to match past context. 'Practice to ride' is incorrect collocation; use 'practice riding' or 'learn to ride'. Also replace 'to go anywhere with him' with 'so I could go anywhere with him' to show purpose and correct modal. Suggestion: ensure the whole sentence stays in past tense for past-time context and use gerund after 'practice'. Replace incorrect contractions and word forms accordingly.

× Yes, I think buy are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and cost effective for short trip.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and cost-effective for short trips.

Errors: 'buy' is a typo for 'bikes'. 'Cost effective' should be hyphenated as 'cost-effective' when used as an adjective. 'Short trip' needs plural 'short trips' to match general statement. Ensure noun spelling and appropriate pluralization when speaking generally.

× Many people prefer caring for commuting, seeing is save money on people or yeah.

✓ Many people prefer them for commuting because they save money.

Sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Prefer caring for commuting' is incorrect; use 'prefer them for commuting' to indicate bikes. 'Seeing is save money on people or yeah' is gibberish; intended meaning is that bikes save people money, so write 'because they save money.' Keep sentences concise and use correct subject ('they') and verb ('save') agreement. Remove filler 'or yeah' in formal responses.