Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with verb tenses, article use, and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors: use past tense consistently (loved, used), include articles where needed, and avoid vague phrases like “like 5 or 6 years.”

例: Yes — I did. My father bought me a pink bicycle for my third birthday, and I loved it. I used it regularly until I was about eight, riding it to the park and around our neighborhood almost every afternoon.

提案: Avoid starting with uncertainty; give a direct opinion first, then support it with clear, specific reasons and linking words. Fix grammar (plural forms, articles) and use more precise vocabulary (commuting, short journeys). Keep answers concise—no more than 4–5 sentences.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular for daily travel in my country. Most people prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster and more convenient for commuting to work or school. Bicycles are mainly used for short journeys or for exercise and leisure.

× I love it and use it for like 5 or 6 years.

✓ I loved it and used it for about five or six years.

The sentence describes a past situation (childhood), so past tense verbs are required. 'Love' and 'use' are present tense; they should be 'loved' and 'used'. Also, use 'about five or six years' for more natural phrasing instead of 'like 5 or 6 years'. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions completed in the past and write numbers in words for small numbers in formal speech.

× I'm not sure about that. I think most people prefer using motorcycles or cars because they are faster and convenient to work and school.

✓ I'm not sure about that. I think most people prefer using motorcycles or cars because they are faster and more convenient for work and school.

The adjective 'convenient' modifies 'they' and needs the comparative structure 'more convenient' when comparing to alternatives. Also, the preposition 'for' is required with 'work and school' to indicate purpose or destination. Suggestion: Use 'more convenient for' when comparing convenience and include correct prepositions.

× Bicycle are usually only just for short trips or for those who want to exercise.

✓ Bicycles are usually only for short trips or for those who want to exercise.

The noun 'Bicycle' is singular while the verb 'are' is plural, causing subject-verb mismatch. Use the plural 'Bicycles' to match 'are'. Also, 'only just' is redundant; 'only' suffices. Suggestion: Make subject and verb agree in number and avoid redundant adverbs like 'only just'.