Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct grammar (tense and agreement), simplify and be natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Keep it under 5 sentences. For example, use past tense: "I had a bike when I was a child." Then give a specific detail: how you used it or a memory, and a linking word like "and" or "so."

例: I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to visit my friends and to ride to school, so I became quite independent early on.

提案: Your answer is clear but repetitive and a bit short. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific reason and an example or brief consequence using linking words like "because" or "however." Avoid repeating phrases such as "in my country."

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience. For example, traffic and long distances make driving more practical, so fewer people choose cycling for daily travel.

× Yes, I have a bike when I were when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a kid.

The student is describing a past situation, so past tense should be used. 'Have' is present tense and 'were' is an incorrect form for the singular subject 'I' in this context. Use the simple past 'had' for possession in the past and 'was' for the past of 'be' with I. Suggestion: think about the time frame (when I was a kid = past) and use past tense verbs consistently (had, was).

× No, bikes are not popular in my country because there are many cars in my country.

✓ No, bikes are not popular in my country because there are many cars.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but contains a redundant phrase 'in my country' repeated. The structure 'there are many cars' correctly uses 'there be' for existence. Improve clarity and conciseness by removing the repeated phrase. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition by stating the location once when it is already clear from context.