Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice and grammar, and add a short supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrasing like “one bike” and “that was when.”

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was eleven, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and accurate: begin with a direct opinion, correct mistakes (e.g., “by” → “bikes”), use linking words for reasons, and give a specific example or result. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular here. Mainly, the hot and rainy weather and frequent traffic jams make cycling uncomfortable and unsafe, so most people prefer cars or public transport.

× Yes, I had one bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'one bike' is grammatically acceptable but sounds unnatural in this context; native speakers typically say 'a bike'. Use the singular indefinite article 'a' before a countable noun to sound more natural. Suggestion: replace 'one bike' with 'a bike'. Grammar_problem_type_id:1

× I remember that was when I was 11.

✓ I remember that it was when I was 11.

The original sentence omits the subject 'it' for the clause 'that it was when I was 11', making the clause incomplete. Insert the dummy subject 'it' to form a complete past tense clause. Also, 'remember' can introduce a noun clause about a past event using 'that it was...'. Suggestion: say 'I remember that it was when I was 11.' Grammar_problem_type_id:5},{