Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammar mistakes, repetition, and unclear details. To improve: 1) Use past tense consistently (“I had a bike”). 2) Avoid repetition and unnecessary words. 3) Give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words (for example, “because,” “so,” or “and”). 4) Keep it under five sentences. Specifically, state who bought the bike, how you used it, and one brief memory or reason why it mattered. Focus on natural phrasing and correct pronouns.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me, and I rode it almost every day to visit my friends. Because I practiced a lot, I became confident riding on busy streets. It was one of my favorite toys and helped me stay active.

提案: Your answer is direct but too short and lacks supporting details. To improve: 1) Start with a clear statement, then add a reason or example using linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “for instance.” 2) Include specifics about where or among which groups bikes are popular (students, commuters, rural areas), and mention one brief reason (cost, convenience, exercise). 3) Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and office workers use bicycles to commute to school or work, especially in quieter neighborhoods.

× Yes, I have a bike when I'm I'm in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses present tense 'have' and 'I'm' but refers to past time 'childhood'. Use past simple 'had' and 'was' to match time reference; also 'when I was a child' is the correct phrase.

× He's bought by my father and I playing in playing very well in life.

✓ It was bought by my father, and I used to ride it a lot.

The original mixes passive present perfect 'He's bought' and fragmented present participles 'I playing' causing ungrammatical structure. The bike purchase occurred in the past so use past passive 'It was bought'. To express habitual past action, use 'used to ride it a lot' or 'I rode it a lot'. Also avoid repeating words and ensure each clause has a finite verb.

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'our country' is odd coming from an individual respondent; 'my country' is more natural. Tense and agreement are fine; this is a lexical/pronoun choice improvement rather than a tense error.