Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify vocabulary and structure, avoid hesitations, and give one or two specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct key words (bike, not back), and add a linked supporting detail using a linking word (for example, because/so). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it every day to go to school because it was faster than walking. I also used it to visit friends on weekends, so it became my main way of getting around.

提案: Improve clarity and vocabulary, avoid repetition, and use linking words to compare places. Use correct words (bike, not bank), group similar ideas together, and provide a brief reason why popularity differs (e.g., traffic, public transport availability). Keep answers concise and coherent.

例: It depends. Bikes are very popular in small towns and rural areas because distances are short and traffic is light. However, in large cities like Beijing and Shanghai they are less common, mainly because public transport is extensive and roads are crowded.

× Yes, I had a back when I was a child and I read it every day, uh, to go to school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I rode it every day to go to school.

Errors: 'back' is a typo for 'bike' (word choice). 'read' is incorrect contextually and grammatically; the past tense of 'ride' is 'rode' (past tense issue, ID 5). Suggestions: replace 'back' with 'bike', change 'read' to 'rode' to correctly describe using the bicycle. Ensure verbs describing past habits use past simple consistently (had, rode).

× I think it depends. In small cities and in urban area and in and in villages, banks are very popular.

✓ I think it depends. In small cities, urban areas, and villages, bikes are very popular.

Errors: 'area' should be plural 'areas' to match 'small cities' and 'villages' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'in and in and' is repetition (sentence structure issue, ID 26). 'banks' is a typo for 'bikes' (word choice). Suggestions: use parallel plural forms ('small cities, urban areas, and villages') and correct 'banks' to 'bikes'. Remove repeated words. Maintain consistent noun plurality.

× But in big cities, international big cities like Beijing and Shanghai, banks are not that popular.

✓ But in large international cities like Beijing and Shanghai, bikes are not that popular.

Errors: 'big cities, international big cities' is wordy and repetitive (sentence structure, ID 26). Prefer 'large international cities'. 'banks' again is a typo for 'bikes' (word choice). 'not that popular' is acceptable but ensure noun plurality matches 'bikes'. Suggestions: simplify phrase to 'large international cities like Beijing and Shanghai' and correct 'banks' to 'bikes'.