Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and organized. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb tenses, remove filler words, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes. I had a nice bike when I was a child that my father gave me. It was bright red, and I was very proud of it because I could ride to my friends' houses on my own. As a result, I felt more independent and enjoyed spending time outdoors.

提案: Be clearer and more confident. Give a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., however, because, therefore). Correct vocabulary (means of transport) and finish the sentence. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: I think bikes are fairly popular in many cities in my country. However, their use varies by region; in my city, bikes are one of the main means of transport because there are many bike lanes and cycling is a convenient, cheap way to commute. Therefore, many people choose bikes for short trips.

× I'll be completely honest with you. I have a quite good bike when I was a child and uh, my father, umm, give it to me.

✓ I'll be completely honest with you. I had a quite good bike when I was a child and, uh, my father gave it to me.

The sentence refers to a past situation, so past tense verbs are required. 'Have' should be 'had' and 'give' should be 'gave' to match past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events (subject + past simple verb).

× I have a quite good bike when I was a child and uh, my father, umm, give it to me. Uh, and I'm very, I'm very proud of my new bike because it was red uh, and that beauty.

✓ I had a quite good bike when I was a child and, uh, my father gave it to me. Uh, and I was very, very proud of my new bike because it was red and beautiful.

Several article and adjective issues: 'a quite good bike' is acceptable but more natural as 'quite a good bike' (word order), and 'that beauty' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'it was beautiful' or 'that beauty' should be 'it was a beauty' but 'beautiful' is correct adjective form. Also tense should remain past ('I was very proud'). Suggestion: use 'quite a good bike', keep adjectives in correct order and form (beautiful), and keep tense consistent.

× So to be honest, I'm not so sure that bikes are too popular in my country, but uh, in our city, bikes are uh, the main mean of transport after of course cars because we have lots of bike lanes and it's so convenient to commute from.

✓ So to be honest, I'm not so sure that bikes are very popular in my country, but, uh, in our city, bikes are the main means of transport after, of course, cars because we have lots of bike lanes and it's very convenient to commute by them.

Multiple issues: 'too popular' is odd here; 'very popular' better expresses uncertainty. 'Main mean of transport' is incorrect: the noun should be 'means' (plural) and 'mean' is wrong. 'Commute from' is incorrect preposition; use 'commute by them' or 'commute by bike'. Also ensure consistent present tense. Suggestion: use 'means of transport' and 'commute by' + mode of transport, and replace 'too' with 'very' in this context.