Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense and expand slightly. Use past tense for childhood and give a short supporting detail. Keep it natural and under 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief detail using a linking word (e.g., "and" or "because").

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about eight, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

提案: The answer has unclear wording and vocabulary errors. Give a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons and correct word choices. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and avoid unrelated fragments. Keep it to 1–3 sentences. Correct the incorrect phrase "rice good rice."

例: Not really. In my city most people prefer scooters or cars because they are faster and more convenient for long distances, for example when commuting to work.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner's question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense. The student's response uses the present perfect 'I have', which is incorrect for a simple past context. Use the simple past 'I did' or the full form 'Yes, I had' to match the past-tense question. Suggestion: answer past-tense questions with past-tense verbs (e.g., 'Yes, I had' or 'Yes, I did').

× No, not at all. I see so many people rice good rice, scooter or drive car in my country.

✓ No, not at all. I see so many people riding bicycles, scooters, or driving cars in my country.

This sentence has multiple problems: incorrect verbs and word choices and incorrect list structure. 'rice good rice' is meaningless and likely a mistranscription of 'ride bicycles' or 'ride bikes'. The verbs in the list must be parallel: use gerunds or present participles consistently ('riding', 'scooting', 'driving') or simple present verbs with appropriate subjects. Also use plural nouns for general statements ('bicycles', 'scooters', 'cars'). Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in a list and choose correct verb-noun collocations (e.g., 'riding bicycles, riding scooters, or driving cars').