Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but has many pronunciation and word choice errors, hesitations, and unclear phrasing. To improve: (1) Use a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. (2) Avoid long pauses and filler words (uh, umm). (3) Choose correct words (e.g., say "my dad bought me" instead of "my dead body" or "bite to me"). (4) Keep the response concise (2–4 sentences) and add one or two specific details (who gave it, why you liked it, how it felt). Practice speaking the corrected sentences aloud to reduce hesitation.

例: Yes. When I was a child my dad bought me a small bicycle as a birthday present. It was a bright red, children’s-sized bike with training wheels, and I loved riding it around the park because it made me feel independent.

提案: Your answer states an opinion but is repetitive and contains unclear vocabulary and grammar. To improve: (1) Start with a direct opinion sentence (Yes/No + brief reason). (2) Use linking words (however, although, but) to connect ideas. (3) Replace vague or incorrect words ("sheer bikes" -> "shared bikes" or "bicycles parked by the road"). (4) Provide a specific reason or example (traffic conditions, culture, or public bike-sharing schemes). Keep it to 2–4 clear sentences.

例: I don't think cycling is very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or motorcycles for daily travel. Although there are some shared bikes parked in cities, few people use them regularly due to heavy traffic and limited bike lanes.

× Yes, when I was a kid, my dead body, uh, bite to me as uh, my birthday present, uh, that spike was not very big because that's for umm, children sized bike and I like.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, my dad bought me a bike as a birthday present. The frame was not very big because it was a child-sized bike, and I liked it.

The student used 'my dead body' instead of 'my dad' and 'bite to me' instead of 'bought me', which are incorrect word choices (pronoun/noun errors). Replace incorrect nouns and pronouns with the intended ones. Also add the missing pronoun 'it' at the end to refer to the bike. Suggestion: practice clear noun selection and check homophones and similar-sounding words (dead/body vs dad, bite/bought). Additionally, separate into two sentences for clarity and include appropriate pronouns ('it') to refer back to the bike.

× Yes, when I was a kid, my dead body, uh, bite to me as uh, my birthday present, uh, that spike was not very big because that's for umm, children sized bike and I like.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, my dad bought me a bike as a birthday present. The frame was not very big because it was a child-sized bike, and I liked it.

The original sentence is a run-on with disfluent filler words and incorrect clause order ('that spike was not very big' is unclear). Reorganize into clear clauses: who gave the gift, what the gift was, and a comment about size and liking. Remove fillers like 'uh' and 'umm'. Practice planning a simple sentence before speaking.

× Yes, when I was a kid, my dead body, uh, bite to me as uh, my birthday present, uh, that spike was not very big because that's for umm, children sized bike and I like.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, my dad bought me a bike as a birthday present. The frame was not very big because it was a child-sized bike, and I liked it.

The phrase 'children sized bike' is incorrect. Use the singular adjective form 'child-sized' to modify 'bike'. Also use 'a bike' rather than no article. Suggestion: use articles appropriately ('a', 'the') and use correct adjective form for units or sizes (child-sized).

× I don't think riding a bike is a popular thing in my country because I because as I can say, although there are some sheer bikes living beside the road and there are very less people, there are very few people to ride it.

✓ I don't think riding a bike is popular in my country because, although there are some shared bikes parked beside the road, very few people ride them.

The original has repetition ('because I because as I can say') and wrong word forms ('sheer' should be 'shared', 'living' is wrong for objects, 'very less people' is incorrect quantifier). Maintain present simple tense for general statements: 'are', 'ride'. Use 'very few people' and change 'ride it' to 'ride them' to agree with plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases, choose correct vocabulary (shared), and keep consistent present-tense verbs for general facts.

× ...there are some sheer bikes living beside the road...

✓ ...there are some shared bikes parked beside the road...

Use 'parked beside' rather than 'living beside' for inanimate objects. 'Living' implies animate beings. Also, 'beside the road' is fine; 'parked' correctly describes the state of bicycles. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs for objects (parked, placed) not verbs for people.

× there are very less people, there are very few people to ride it.

✓ there are very few people who ride them.

'Very less people' is ungrammatical in English; use 'few' or 'very few' with countable nouns. Also, make subject-verb and pronoun agreement: 'people who ride them' not 'people to ride it'. Suggestion: learn correct quantifiers: 'few', 'a few', 'many', 'several' and match pronouns to plural nouns.