Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural, avoid hesitations like “umm,” and limit to up to five sentences. For example, state whether you had a bike, mention who gave it to you or where you rode it, and include a brief time reference or feeling.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend. Because the park was close to our house, I quickly learned to ride confidently and made many childhood memories there.

提案: Your answer shows a clear opinion but is disorganized and contains hesitations and an irrelevant phrase (“variety of spice”). To improve, state your opinion directly, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words (for example, because/for instance/also). Remove filler words and correct irrelevant vocabulary. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and commuting to work. For example, in my town many students and office workers ride bicycles to save money and avoid traffic, and there are several bike lanes that make cycling convenient.

× In my opinion, yes I do see a lot of bikes around my home and my home country when I go out UMM.

✓ In my opinion, yes, I see a lot of bikes around my home and in my country when I go out.

The sentence uses an unnecessary auxiliary 'do' for simple present affirmative ('I see') and repeats 'my home' redundantly. Also 'my home country' is better phrased as 'in my country' for clarity. Remove 'do' in affirmative present sentences and avoid repetition. Add commas for clarity and remove filler 'UMM'. Suggestion: Use simple present 'I see' for habitual observations and revise phrases for conciseness.

× I feel like there are variety of spice umm in my town area.

✓ I feel like there is a variety of spices in my town.

The phrase 'there are variety of spice' is ungrammatical. 'Variety' as a singular noun requires an article: 'a variety of', and the noun it modifies should be plural: 'spices'. Also 'town area' is awkward; 'in my town' is more natural. Remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: Use 'a variety of + plural noun' and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'there is a variety of spices' or simply 'there are many different spices'.