Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: แก้ไขความชัดเจนและโครงสร้างประโยค: ควรตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจน แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น ใครให้ หรือคุณใช้จักรยานบ่อยแค่ไหน หลีกเลี่ยงการชะงักและคำซ้ำซ้อน ฝึกใช้ linking words เช่น “because” หรือ “so” เพื่อความต่อเนื่อง ประโยคไม่ควรยาวเกิน 4-5 ประโยค

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven because they wanted me to learn independence and get exercise. I used it almost every day to ride around the neighborhood with my friends, which helped me become more confident on the road.

提案: ปรับความชัดเจนและให้รายละเอียดที่เป็นรูปธรรม: เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ตอบตรงคำถาม แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนโดยใช้ linking words เช่น “because”, “for example” และยกตัวอย่างเฉพาะ เช่น ใช้เพื่อทำงาน ออกกำลังกาย หรือเดินทางสั้นๆ หลีกเลี่ยงคำไม่สมบูรณ์และการสะดุด

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use bikes for short commutes to work or school because it is cheap and convenient. Others ride in parks or on weekends for exercise and leisure, especially in cities with dedicated cycling lanes.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I had.

The question asks about a past situation ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense; 'had' is the correct past tense. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame mentioned (use past simple for completed past states).

× When I was young I had a one bike because my parents umm. Me to practice, to be involved the the taste of.

✓ When I was young I had one bike because my parents wanted me to practice and to get involved in cycling.

Multiple issues: 'a one bike' is incorrect article/number order (use 'one bike' or 'a bike') and word order. The clause about parents is incomplete and lacks a verb; 'wanted me to practice' is needed. 'To be involved the the taste of' is ungrammatical; intended meaning likely 'to get involved in cycling' or 'to enjoy it.' Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structures, place quantifiers before nouns correctly, and use appropriate verbs ('want someone to do something', 'get involved in + noun').

× Yes, I think it's depend on individuals.

✓ Yes, I think it depends on the individual.

'It depend' lacks third-person singular -s; use 'depends'. Also 'individuals' as a general noun is better expressed as 'the individual' or 'individuals' with different structure. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose singular/plural to match meaning; here 'it depends on the individual' is natural for general statements.

× Some people have a pay.

✓ Some people use bikes to commute to work.

'Have a pay' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely the student meant 'have to pay' or 'use them for commuting to work.' Suggestion: express purpose with 'use bikes to...' or obligations with 'have to + verb'.

× Have my for work or some people have buy for do exercise in the park and.

✓ Some people use them for work, and some people buy them for exercising in the park.

Fragmented and wrong verb forms: 'Have my for work' lacks subject and correct verb; 'have buy for do exercise' mixes base forms. Use 'use' for purpose and 'buy' correctly: 'buy them for exercising' or 'to exercise'. Suggestion: form parallel structures for 'some... and some...' and use infinitives or -ing for purpose consistently.

× I think it's several reasons.

✓ I think there are several reasons.

Incorrect use of 'it's' and missing 'there' for existence. Use 'there are' to indicate multiple reasons. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for stating existence and match number with 'are' for plural.