Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và chọn từ chính xác hơn; trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và liên kết rõ ràng. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng thì quá khứ đúng: 'had' thay vì 'have' và 'was' thay vì 'were'. (2) Sửa từ sai chính tả: 'bike' thay vì 'buy'. (3) Rút gọn câu để tránh lặp từ (ví dụ 'farther' hoặc 'further' — chỉ cần một từ). (4) Thêm một liên từ hoặc cụm từ liên kết ngắn nếu muốn mở rộng, ví dụ 'because' đã đủ; không cần quá nhiều chi tiết. (5) Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school every day because it was too far to walk. I liked the freedom it gave me and often rode with friends on the way.

提案: Chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều/ít và số từ: dùng 'bikes' và 'country' (số ít) hoặc 'countries' nếu nói nhiều nước. Cải thiện tính mạch lạc bằng cách dùng liên từ ngắn (for example, because, and) và thêm 1 chi tiết cụ thể làm bằng chứng (ví dụ: nhiều người đi làm, số lượng bãi đỗ xe cho xe đạp, hoặc con số). Giữ câu ngắn, không lặp ý giống nhau (cheap và convenient có thể gộp).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people of all ages use them because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. In big cities, bikes are often faster than cars during rush hour, and many workplaces provide bike parking.

× Yes, I have a buy.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The student used incorrect words and wrong tense: 'have' (present) should be 'had' (past) because the question asks about childhood. 'buy' is a wrong word form; the correct noun is 'bike'. Use past simple for past situations: 'I had a bike.' Suggestions: replace 'have' with 'had' and 'buy' with 'bike'.

× When I were a child I used to ride it from my home to school every day because it was farther further than walking and I enjoyed the freedom.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride it from my home to school every day because it was farther than walking and I enjoyed the freedom.

Multiple issues: 'were' is incorrect for singular first person in past simple; use 'was' (subject-verb agreement / past tense). The phrase 'farther further' is a redundancy; choose 'farther' (distance) or 'further' but 'farther than walking' is correct. Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Suggestions: change 'were' to 'was', remove the extra word 'further', and punctuate with a comma after the introductory clause.

× Yes, of course. Bike are very popular in my countries.

✓ Yes, of course. Bikes are very popular in my country.

'Bike' should be plural 'Bikes' to match 'are' (subject-verb agreement / singular and plural issue). 'Countries' should be singular 'country' if referring to the speaker's country; use 'my country'. Suggestions: use plural 'Bikes' and singular 'country' unless the speaker means multiple countries.

× Many people ride them, from young children to elderly people.

✓ Many people ride them, from young children to elderly people.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. Note: for style, you could say 'from young children to the elderly' but it is optional. No change required.

× They are very cheap, convenient for short journeys and often faster than car in crowded streets.

✓ They are very cheap, convenient for short journeys, and often faster than cars in crowded streets.

Comparative phrase needs plural 'cars' or the definite article: 'faster than cars' or 'faster than a car' (incorrect: 'faster than car'). Also add a comma before 'and' in a list of three for clarity. Suggestions: change 'car' to 'cars' and add a comma after 'journeys'.