Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and fewer repetitions. Use one or two supporting details (e.g., who gave the bike and how you used it). Also correct tense and count nouns (use 'many' with plural noun) and remove hesitations.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me several bikes when I was a child, and I often rode them around the neighborhood to visit friends and run small errands.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because and also). Avoid repetition and improve grammar (countable nouns, verb agreement). Give one concrete example of a competition or how people use bikes for fitness to make the answer more specific.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily transport and fitness. For example, annual events like the national cycling race attract thousands of participants, and many families cycle together on weekends to stay healthy.

× Yes, whenever I I was tired and I I have a many bikes which my parents bought for me.

✓ Yes, whenever I was tired I had many bikes that my parents bought for me.

Error: incorrect use of the quantifier phrase 'a many bikes' and tense inconsistency. 'Many' does not take the indefinite article 'a'; use 'many bikes' without 'a'. Also maintain past tense throughout the sentence to match 'when you were a child' context: change 'have' to 'had'. Additionally remove duplicate words 'I I'. Suggestion: use 'I had many bikes' to be grammatically correct and consistent in tense. (Grammar problem type ID: 14)

× Yes, I think the bikes are popular in our country because there are various competitions where the, where the the bicycle racing are also conducted.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in our country because there are various competitions where bicycle races are also held.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'bikes' when speaking generally; repetition 'the the'; incorrect noun phrase 'bicycle racing' used with plural verb 'are' and awkward passive 'are also conducted'. Use plural noun 'bicycles' without 'the' for general statements. Replace 'bicycle racing are also conducted' with 'bicycle races are also held' to match plural form and natural phrasing. (Grammar problem type IDs: 22 and 27)

× So, uh, by the bicycles, our bodies also keep fit.

✓ So, by riding bicycles, our bodies also stay fit.

Errors: incorrect prepositional phrase 'by the bicycles' and awkward verb 'keep fit' with wrong form. Use gerund phrase 'by riding bicycles' to express the means, and use 'stay fit' or 'keep fit' with correct subject-verb form; 'our bodies stay fit' is more natural. (Grammar problem type IDs: 11 and 26)

× So I think there are various bicycles which are popular in my own country.

✓ So I think various kinds of bicycles are popular in my country.

Errors: redundant phrasing 'various bicycles which are popular' and awkward 'my own country'. Use 'various kinds of bicycles' or simply 'various bicycles' and prefer 'my country' for natural speech. Also avoid the relative clause when simple noun phrase suffices. (Grammar problem type ID: 14)