Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with past-tense phrasing and word order. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundant or unclear phrases (for example, “it was really interesting when” is incomplete). Use varied vocabulary like “enjoyable” or “a memorable routine.” Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I used to ride it every evening with my father. We often rode around the neighbourhood and sometimes went to the park, which was a memorable routine. Those rides helped me become confident on a bike and created good memories.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples, using linking words (e.g. “because,” “for example,” “also”). Correct grammar errors (remove extra articles and repeated words) and clarify vague time references like “in my time.” Use precise vocabulary such as “affordable,” “eco-friendly,” or “accessible.” Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money on petrol. Also, cycling is encouraged in some cities with dedicated lanes and bike-sharing programs, which makes it easier for people to choose bikes over cars.

× When I had been a child, I had a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

Uses past perfect 'had been' incorrectly; simple past 'was' is appropriate to state a past time condition. Use 'when I was a child' to indicate a time period in the past rather than a completed action before another past action.

× I used to ride a bike every evening with my father and it was a really interesting when.

✓ I used to ride my bike every evening with my father and it was really interesting.

Problems: 'a bike' should be 'my bike' to show possession when referring to the speaker's bike; 'a really interesting when' is ungrammatical — 'interesting' is an adjective needing a noun or be used predicatively. Use 'it was really interesting' or 'it was a really interesting time'. Also removed the unnecessary article before 'really'.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is correct as written; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× Many people prefer to use a bikes rather than use use cars because bikes are more convenient, cheaper and in my time.

✓ Many people prefer to use bikes rather than cars because bikes are more convenient, cheaper and more common in my country.

Errors fixed: removed the incorrect article 'a' before 'bikes' (plural nouns do not take 'a'); removed duplicate 'use'; simplified comparison 'prefer to use bikes rather than cars' (no second 'use' needed). 'in my time' is unclear — replaced with 'more common in my country' to make sense in context; added 'more' before 'common' for parallel comparative structure with 'cheaper'.