Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention when or where you imagined riding and a reason why you missed it to make the answer concrete.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. However, I often imagined riding around my neighborhood after school because it would have given me freedom and a fun way to explore nearby parks. For example, I pictured riding to the small playground three streets away with my friends, which is why I still miss that experience.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then add a specific comparison and a brief reason using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid filler words to sound natural and confident.

例: Not really — conventional bicycles aren’t very popular in my country. Instead, most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and cheaper to use for daily commuting; for instance, I see whole families riding motorbikes to work and markets every day.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is correct; it uses the past simple correctly to describe a past state. No change needed.

× I always wished to have a bike, but my parents couldn't afford it.

✓ I always wished I had a bike, but my parents couldn't afford one.

Use of 'wished to have' is not idiomatic for a continuous desire in the past; 'wished I had' or 'always wanted' is more natural. Also replace 'a bike' at end with 'one' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: say 'I always wanted a bike' or 'I always wished I had a bike.'

× I thought of riding the bike in the neighborhood, uh, and uh, I really miss the experience.

✓ I thought of riding a bike in the neighborhood, and I really miss that experience.

Use 'a bike' or 'bikes' rather than 'the bike' when speaking generally. 'The experience' is vague; 'that experience' refers back to riding. Also match tense: 'thought of' (past) with 'miss' (present) is acceptable if meaning is current longing; keep 'miss' for present feeling. Remove filler 'uh, and uh' in corrected sentence. Use 'thought of' + gerund is correct here.

× I wish I had that experience.

✓ I wish I had had that experience.

When expressing regret about the past, English uses past perfect after 'wish' (wish + past perfect) to indicate a desire for something that did not happen. 'I wish I had that experience' implies desire now rather than regret about a past missed event. Use 'I wish I had had that experience' to show past regret.

× Well no, bikes are not really popular in my country.

✓ Well, no, bikes are not really popular in my country.

Sentence is grammatically correct; only punctuation/pausing improved by adding a comma after 'Well'. Present simple 'are' correctly describes a general truth.

× Uh, besides, motorbikes are really popular in my country and almost everyone have a motorbike.

✓ Besides, motorbikes are really popular in my country and almost everyone has a motorbike.

'Almost everyone' is singular for grammatical agreement, so the verb must be 'has' rather than 'have'. Also remove filler 'Uh' and unnecessary repetition; keep 'motorbikes' and 'a motorbike' to contrast general popularity with individual ownership.