Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically accurate, concise, and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly (use past tense), then briefly explain with a specific reason or example. Use linking words for coherence and avoid repetition. For example, say you didn’t have a bike and give a short reason for the phobia (when it started or what caused it).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I was afraid of riding after I fell once at age seven, so my parents didn't teach me. As a result, I avoided bikes until I was older.

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific. Begin with a direct statement, then give two brief, linked reasons or examples (cost and practicality) using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Use plural/singular agreement and varied vocabulary (e.g., bicycles, affordable, practical, commuters).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. For example, many students and low-income workers use them for short commutes, and they are especially common in crowded cities where parking is limited.

× No, I don't have bike when I was a child and I have, I had a phobia of riding back.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, and I had a phobia of riding a bike.

Multiple errors: 1) Tense consistency (Grammar Problem Type ID 5 Past tense issue and 6 Present tense issue): The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'didn't have' instead of present 'don't have'. 2) Article error (ID 22 Article errors): 'bike' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 3) Redundant/incorrect phrase 'I have, I had' and unclear noun 'riding back' (ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns/words and ID 26 Sentence structure errors): Remove the present clause and keep past tense 'I had a phobia'. 4) Word choice: 'riding back' is incorrect; specify 'riding a bike'. Suggestion: Keep all clauses in the past when talking about childhood and use appropriate articles and clear noun phrases.

× Yes, bikes play a crucial role in our country as it is cheap source of transport and people like to buy it.

✓ Yes, bikes play a crucial role in our country because they are a cheap means of transport and people like to buy them.

Errors and fixes: 1) Pronoun agreement/Subject-verb agreement (ID 27 Subject-verb agreement and ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns): 'bikes' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb form 'are' instead of 'it is'. 2) Article/word choice (ID 22 Article errors and ID 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs): Use 'a cheap means of transport' rather than 'cheap source of transport' for natural phrasing; 'means' is singular with 'a'. 3) Pronoun reference for 'bikes' at the end: use 'them' not 'it'. Suggestion: Match pronouns and verbs to the noun number, and prefer natural collocations like 'means of transport' or 'mode of transport'.