Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student did not answer the question. Give a direct response (yes/no or brief statement) followed by one or two supporting details. Keep it natural, up to 5 sentences, and use linking words if adding details. For example, mention whether you had a bike, how often you used it, and a short reason or memory.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to my friend’s house and to the park. Because my neighbourhood was small and safe, cycling was my main way to play outside and explore.

提案: The answer gives a basic opinion but is unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Improve by stating your opinion directly, then add one or two specific supporting details or examples using linking words (for example, because, also, for instance). Keep to natural phrasing and limit to up to 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, cities have dedicated bike lanes and bike-sharing programs, which makes cycling convenient. Also, cycling events and weekend group rides are common, showing its popularity.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular not in not only in my country, they are very popular in the worldwide and.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are not only popular in my country, but they are also very popular worldwide.

This sentence has several issues: incorrect word order and duplication ('not in not only in'), wrong use of 'the' with 'worldwide', and an unnecessary trailing conjunction 'and'. According to the provided list, these are 'Incorrect conjunction use' (16) and 'Sentence structure errors' (26). The correct structure for expressing two related places uses the correlative conjunction pair 'not only... but also'. Also, 'worldwide' is an adverb/adjective used without 'the'. Suggestion: use 'not only popular in my country, but also popular worldwide' or the concise form given above. Replace duplicated words, remove the extra 'in' and 'and', and place 'also' after 'are' for natural emphasis.