Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cấu trúc và ngữ pháp: Sửa lỗi thì và chia động từ (dùng quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ). Tổ chức câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh tiếng lắp (uh) và lặp từ. Từ vựng: dùng từ đơn giản nhưng chính xác (e.g., "ride" -> "rode", "by myself" là tốt). Luôn dùng tối đa 5 câu. Ví dụ điều chỉnh tập trung vào việc nêu thời điểm, tần suất và lý do ngắn gọn.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it to school every day because my parents were busy and could not drive me. Riding gave me independence and I enjoyed the fresh air on the way to school.

提案: Ngữ pháp và từ vựng: Sửa lỗi phát âm/nhầm từ ("Mortuary" sai nghĩa, có lẽ ý là "motorbikes" hoặc "motorcycles"). Dùng thì chính xác và rõ ràng (hiện tại cho xu hướng hiện nay). Câu trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một kết luận. Tránh lặp từ và nói mơ hồ. Nên cung cấp ví dụ ngắn (ví dụ: giá cả, tiện lợi).

例: Yes, bikes used to be very popular, but now motorbikes are more common. Many people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and easier to use in traffic. As a result, fewer children learn to ride traditional bicycles for daily travel.

× Yes, when I have uh when I were try I usually used my bike to go to school since no one can take me to school so I ride my bike by myself.

✓ Yes, when I was young I usually used my bike to go to school since no one could take me, so I rode my bike by myself.

The sentence contains multiple tense and verb form errors. 'when I have' should be 'when I was' for past reference (Present tense issue ID 6 and Past tense issue ID 5). 'when I were try' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'when I was young' or 'when I tried' — context fits 'when I was young.' 'I usually used' and 'I ride' mix present and past; maintain past tense: 'I usually used' and 'I rode'. 'can' should be 'could' to match past. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past for a past-time narrative and simplify the clause structure to 'when I was young' or 'when I was a child.'

× Yes, I think it was, but nowadays Mortuary becomes more popular in my country since in the key can ride a little motor motor bicycle, yes, so it's become less bite.

✓ Yes, I used to think bikes were popular, but nowadays motorbikes have become more popular in my country because even children can ride small motorbikes, so cycling has become less common.

This sentence mixes tenses and has many incorrect word choices and structures. 'I think it was' mixes present and past; use 'I used to think' or 'I thought' for past opinion (Present tense issue ID 6). 'Mortuary' is incorrect word choice — should be 'motorbikes' (vocabulary error but treated as sentence structure/word choice). 'becomes' should be 'have become' or 'has become' to indicate change up to now (Present perfect, Future/Present tense issue ID 7/6). 'in the key can ride' is ungrammatical; intended meaning 'even children can ride'—fix preposition and noun. 'so it's become less bite' should be 'so cycling has become less common.' Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits, present perfect for changes over time, and correct nouns 'motorbikes' and 'children.'