Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two short supporting details. Use correct pronouns and possessives (my brother's bike), and avoid repetition. Keep answer to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words if you add details (for example, "because" or "so").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It actually belonged to my brother, so I used it mainly when he wasn’t using it. Because we shared it, I learned to be careful and take care of it.

提案: Improve sentence variety, grammar (use present tense and singular/plural agreement), and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, "because", "therefore", "for instance") to connect ideas and be concise. Add a brief specific example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because petrol is expensive. Therefore, many people choose motorcycles or scooters as a cheaper and faster way to commute. For instance, in my neighborhood most commuters use a motorbike to get to work or the market.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: Change present simple verbs to past simple when referring to past situations.

× When I am child it was the bike was my brother.

✓ When I was a child, the bike belonged to my brother.

Multiple issues: tense is incorrect ('am' should be past 'was'), and sentence structure is confused with an extra 'was'. Also 'the bike was my brother' is ungrammatical; use 'belonged to my brother' to show possession in the past. Suggestion: Use simple past for past-time clauses and a clear verb phrase for possession ('belonged to').

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country due to petrol prices.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because petrol prices are high.

The original mixes a correct present statement with an unclear reason clause using 'due to petrol prices.' It's clearer to state the reason with 'because' and keep present tense for the explanatory clause ('are high'). Suggestion: Use 'because' for clear causal clauses and maintain consistent present tense for general truths.

× Petrol prices was very high in our country so that's why bikes are very popular and many people use bikes for our transportation from one place to another.

✓ Petrol prices were very high in the past, so bikes became very popular and many people used them for transportation.

The clause 'Petrol prices was' has a subject-verb agreement error and wrong tense: 'prices' (plural) requires 'were'. Also the sentence mixes past and present inconsistently. Because the speaker references a past reason, use past tense: 'were', 'became', 'used'. Replace 'use bikes for our transportation from one place to another' with 'used them for transportation' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense when explaining past causes and effects.