Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and produce a natural, concise response. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one short supporting detail. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that I used to ride around my neighborhood almost every day when I was about eight; it helped me learn balance and independence.

提案: Make the response more fluent and precise. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific, linked reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Avoid filler words, incorrect possessives, and vague phrases like 'normal persons' or 'reach their destiny.'

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. Also, many students and manual workers prefer cycling to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past events (I had, I was).

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people's who do do the uh jobs can go via bike and many many students and normal persons use bike to reach their destiny.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people who work in various jobs go by bike, and many students and ordinary people use bikes to reach their destinations.

This sentence has multiple issues: the phrase 'people's who do do the uh jobs' uses incorrect possessive and repeats verbs; 'go via bike' uses wrong preposition; 'normal persons' is unnatural; 'use bike' and 'reach their destiny' have noun/verb and word choice errors. Corrections: remove incorrect apostrophe in 'people's' to 'people', replace 'do do the uh jobs' with 'work in various jobs', use 'go by bike' (correct preposition), pluralize 'bike' to 'bikes' and 'destination' to 'destinations', and use 'ordinary people' instead of 'normal persons'. Also streamline repetition and filler words. Suggestion: Speak in clear, concise phrases and pre-plan vocabulary to avoid fillers; check subject-verb agreement and plural forms.