Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question asked: give a direct topic sentence about whether you had a bike, then add one or two brief supporting details. Use correct pronouns and simple past tense. Keep it natural and avoid repeating the examiner's wording incorrectly.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used to ride it to visit my friend every weekend. Because it was light and easy to handle, I learned to ride quickly and felt very confident.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No) and follow with specific, coherent reasons and examples. Use correct vocabulary (people, ride) and linking words (for example, because, so) to make your response logical. Keep sentences short and correct grammar (present simple for general facts).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people ride bikes for exercise or to go to work, especially in the evenings. Because cycling is affordable and convenient in my neighbourhood, I often see families and students riding together.

× Did you have a bag when you were your child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

The student used the wrong pronoun 'your' before 'child' and changed 'bike' to 'bag', causing meaning and grammar errors. 'Your child' implies someone else’s child; the question should ask about the listener's own childhood, so use 'a child' after 'you were'. Also the original examiner asked about a 'bike', so use the correct noun 'bike'. Suggestion: use 'when you were a child' to indicate the listener's childhood and keep noun consistent with the question.

× Yes, I think so because many soil ride bikes in front of my house every afternoon and I enjoyed every afternoon when I see the choice right there. His bicycles then uh, I prefer be happy with.

✓ Yes, I think so because many people ride bikes in front of my house every afternoon, and I enjoy every afternoon when I see the bicycles there. I prefer to be happy with that.

This long utterance has several problems but primarily incorrect word choice and pronouns: 'soil' is incorrect — the intended word is 'people'; 'ride' must match plural subject 'many people' so 'ride' is correct; tense consistency: use present simple 'enjoy' because this is a habitual action; 'see the choice right there' is unclear — replace with 'see the bicycles there'; 'His bicycles then uh, I prefer be happy with' mixes pronouns and wrong verb form. Replace with 'I prefer to be happy with that.' Also use a comma to join clauses. Suggestions: choose correct nouns ('people', 'bicycles'), keep present simple for habitual actions, avoid unclear phrases like 'choice' and use infinitive 'to be' after 'prefer'.